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Romance-luver222 2007-12-06 ch 13,	abuseBRILLIANT POEM! Seriously, wow. Such a great ending to the story! I love it. It would be great if this story could be made into a movie...I would see it! Anyway, great poem. It really ends the story perfectly.
Romance-luver222 2007-12-06 ch 12,	abuseUm...I'm speechless. I have no words. I mean...this ending...was just...brilliant. I mean, first of all, I didn't see Von killing himself coming. I mean, it doesn't really suprise me since Nicki is dead, but still...I figured he would live and I don't know...go on with his life. I know, stupid thought, but I never saw Von's death coming. But also to bring in some of my fav shakespeare quotes in or even to use shakespeare, the god of writing, at all (if you couldn't tell...i'm a bit of a fan of the man). But everything was just...perfect. Just to give you an idea how much I loved and was touched by it...tears are streaming down my face. I mean, I love Von! He was my fav! But out of everyone...he had the best ending. But just...wow. I don't know what else to say. I'm speechless. This chapter was the best of them all. You definitely have to get this published now! Just for this chapter alone. Anyway, I loved this chapter and I am completely sad with what happened to both Von and Nicki, but especially Von. Fantastic Job! This was truly brilliant! Now if you'll excuse me...I have to recollect myself from this emotional blow. :-(
Romance-luver222 2007-12-06 ch 11,	abuseAWE! Poor Nicki! I am seriously sad now! That was a brilliant end to his character though. I mean...I hate Damiano a lot more then I did now...but yet...I still think he's awesome. He's got this "omg evil" dark thing going on about him. But anyway, the whole part where Damiano is controlling Nicki and trying to kill him...not nice! I really wanted to punch Damiano right then and there. Gr. But the part that really got to me was when Nicki was able to swing around to Von, tell him what he needed to know, and kiss him one last time. How heartbreaking is that? I just loved it! And then to end it with Von at Nicki's funeral. How sad. This was seriously another awesome chapter. I loved it! It was so intense and dramatic. I feel so bad right now. Poor Nicki. I figured he was going to be the one that died. I don't know why...but it just works. I mean, he was breaking a part...soon there wouldn't be anything to him anyway. He, as it is said, wouldn't be able to really be with Von in reality, which means he would be left with Damiano...not good. So I can definitely see why you killed him off. It was for the best. He was meant to die. He had to die. Well...I'm offically depressed. But I am on to read the next chapter. I'm not sure what will happen, since it seems to be basically done...but I guess I'll find out. You did a fantastic job though! Seriously, such a great end to an awesome character!
Romance-luver222 2007-12-06 ch 10,	abuseHey hey...I'm finally reading your stuff now! Took me long enough, huh? lol. Anyway, dude...this chapter was just brillant. I mean, so much stuff happened and there are three chapters left. I don't even know what is able to happen now...but I guess I will find out. Obviously something big will happen...I mean...obviously. This chapter was just filled with intense stuff. I mean one after the other. First, I have to say, though the crow girl freaked me out...I felt bad about the whole hanging thing, especially when she had tried to help everyone. I'm guessing she's dead, but we didn't actually see her die, so i'm thinking there is a possibility of her being alive...but it's just a thought. Then that whole trap room thing...that was intense...especially the end of it when Nicki almost didn't make it through. I was thinking that Nicki was going to die right then and there, but thankfully he didn't. I think my favorite part though was the ballroom part. I thought the description of the room was very good. Plus, I just liked how everyone, especially Von and Nicki could take a moment out of all the crazy stuff that has happened and just be with each other. But I think it was also awesome that when they were going to leave, the room became grey, dirty, and disgusting, the opposite of what it was. I really liked that bit of it. Then the climatic conclusion of this chapter was just intense. I mean, walking across an imaginary floor by not thinking about anything and then Nicki basically almost dying...that was super intense. I seriously thought Nicki was a goner. Seriously. That whole moment was there, like in every book or movie, where it is setup for a character to die. I could feel the tears creep up on me because I pretty much thought that was the end for Nicki...but no! He survived! I mean, he still could die...but hey...at least he lives for another chapter! Anyway, I loved this chapter. I was so into it because it was just so intense. Again...just one thing right after another. It was fantastic! I am so excited to read the next chapters to see what happens to everyone. But yeah, great job! Seriously, great job! On to the next chapter I go to see what lies for these awesome characters!
Swabbie 2007-11-05 ch 12, anon.	abuseO.o Intense, but fitting I think. It's such a Von-ish way to go. And Gwyn is positively creepy in her calmness. Also, I think Aldrik needs a hug... heh.
Romance-luver222 2007-10-26 ch 9,	abuseWow! This is getting really intense. I'm thinking the next chapter or so is when the really hits the fan. Poor Nicki. He's getting all broken and everything, which is just not cool. Why do I think that that thing that Damiano talked about with Nicki shattering and Von watching is foreshadowing? It's just a thought I have. I will be omg sad if it's so...but I have this feeling that things won't end well. Von being blonde again...too amusing. I thought the whole thing where they were in a doll house was really inventive and awesome. Very cool idea. I'm starting to get at Damiano, yet I still think he's kind of cool and I want to see more of him. SO MANY CONFLICTING EMOTIONS! Anywhoozle. Up date your story soon! I want to know what happens next!
Romance-luver222 2007-10-14 ch 8,	abuseWow...just...wow. I am in some form of shock. I mean, everything...well...almost everything...makes sense now. This chapter just made almost everything in the series just click. I really liked this chapter. It's obviously the most revealing (so far) in the series. But I love how all of the stories are totally connected and are brought together in this one because of Damiano. Cooleo. I feel bad for Von...I mean...yuck the whole skin thing. And obviously Nicki...his life totally sucks. He's a doll, he can't feel anything, he has a crack down his face, damiano is controlling him and wants Von for a reason that we don't know right now. Nicki's life offically sucks right now. I can't wait to see more Damiano and also to see where this story goes. Totally an't wait. So update soon! Like now...lol. Awesome chap!
Romance-luver222 2007-10-10 ch 7,	abuseYAY! Damiano has entered the building! Well this was an interesting chapter. Very exciting and cool. I liked how Nicki was introduced back into the story. At first ya think he's completely from what happened with Von, but then...dun da da...Damiano is controlling him...the . But I have to say, though Damiano is obviously super evil...I love him. I can't wait to see more of him and find out more of his connection with Nicki and Von. Also, to see what he puts the lovers through next...poor Nicki, Von, and Aldrik. They're going through so much crap right now. But okay...I'm confussed about something...was Nicki a doll this whole time? If so, that makes no sense...I'm confussed and lost on this one. I obviously missed something. I mean it makes some sense, but not much. Anyway, other then that, I thought it was really good and I seriously can't wait for the next chapter!
Romance-luver222 2007-10-07 ch 6,	abuseWow...I'm confused...but in a good way. I have no idea what's going on with the exact ending of this chapter. But before I go into that I must say, it was again, another awesome chapter. A bit gross and disturbing, but still good. Well descripted. The whole skin thing was really just plain wrong...I mean...yuck...sticking skin...that sucks. But I thought the whole picture and Dorian Grey stuff was really smart and cool. I mean, wow, VON STABBING HIMSELF! I was in shock for a good minute, until I read on and saw that he wasn't dead. I feel better now. Granted, he's really hurt...but still alive! But the ending of the chapter with people finding them...I totally want to know who they are! So in that fact I am confused because I have conflicting thoughts. Anyway, great chapter.
Romance-luver222 2007-10-05 ch 5,	abuseUm...omg! Did Aldrik just do what I think he did? Did I understand correctly...did he just rip off Von's hands?!?!? That's what it seemed like...if so...omg...and OMG! Wow, that was seriously a great chapter. The whole confrontation between Von and Aldrik was awesome. I loved the dialouge between them. The description in this chapter was one of the best for this story. I literally felt like I was there in that room with the dead birds with Von. Though not a pleasent feeling, was great because I could picture everything perfectly. But wow...so disgusting. I mean, wow...this magician guy is messed up! But I CAN'T WAIT until he comes into the story! I'm really looking forward to it, and when Nicki is found again. Anyway, you must update very very very soon! I need to know what's up with Von, because if what I think happened happened...OMG! I need to know! Again, Great job with this chap!
Swabbie 2007-10-03 ch 5, anon.	abuseEep! Creepy, I like it! The little girl is such a funky character :) I would recommend spell check though. hehe I forget which page it's on but there's a sentence around here somewhere that didn't make sense because it got a little jumbled, plus some random letter flip-flopping. Silly Chubbly.
Jay (again) 2007-10-01 ch 2, anon.	abuseI liked this chapter (especially the diner and the house description), but you need to be more careful when you edit. For example, the garden would have been long barren, not long baron. Other than that, when you're writing long conversations, not putting names at the end can make it a little confusing for someone who's not paying full attention. Overall, though, this chapter was better than the last and quite interesting.
Jay (who else?) 2007-10-01 ch 1, anon.	abuseInteresting. I don't know what I think of emo!suicidal!Von - I mean, I can see where he's coming from, but it's still a little jarring because he's so different when we talk (or rather, when Ariadne argues with him). I like Aldrik and his whole voice-of-common-sense role. It annoyed me a bit that Aldrik and Von hadn't heard from Nicki for so long but then he phones Aldrik while they're in the car. Was the call really necessary? Other than that, I liked it (of course). After reading your poetry for so long, reading your prose is a little...different, but it's still cool in its own way. Looking forward to the next chapter!
Romance-luver222 2007-09-22 ch 4,	abuseThis was seriously an awesome chapter! I mean, I loved it! It was so dark and creepy...which definitely keeped my interest! I had no clue what was coming next. I thought the little riddle to get out of the room was very clever! And man oh man is that little girl creepy...i mean wow... Plus, something occured to me that I won't post here cause people might acutally read your stuff some day and I will have given away the answer to all the stories. But I'll talk to you about. Anyway, if was freaking amazing. Von and Aldrik are an awesome team...even though they bicker a lot...but that's what I like about them...lol. I seriously can't wait for the next chapter! Write and post soon...I want to know where the tunnel leads! And I want to see the Magician! But again...this chap was awesome!
Romance-luver222 2007-09-22 ch 3,	abuseAnother great chapter! It answered some questions that I had, like...Von's father is dead...or is he...i'm still not convinced. I really like Aldrik taking control and being the leader. But I have to say, when Von was getting all harsh and physical with Aldrik...I wasn't too happy. I liked that you brought in Vampire Chronicles...and I had another "awe" moment when Von said that he didn't get through the Lestat one becasue Nicki's death was too ** him, which could be taken as foreshadoing...but who knows. I also wanted to say, that I don't know when this is takening place (present day, past, future)...but if it's anywhere near the present...remember that New Orleans had that terrible flooding and that it still isn't the way it was...just a reminder. Because the way you've had it so far...New Orleans is gorgeous and magnifaciant...but in reality...it's not like that so much anymore. But I really am liking where this story is going...and can't wait to read more! Yay! Great job!

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