I really like your essay. It has Great imagery! I especially like how you worded your essay, for example: “can kiss your soul with the brush of butterfly wings, or grasp you and shake you till you are thoroughly rattled.” This particular passage gives great imagery and the reader will have no difficulty understanding what you mean by how fear may grip oneself. You did not stop the imagery there but instead used it throughout your essay. Great Job! However, I would recommend making your essay more professional. The using of the words “you” and “us” make it less professional. Perhaps there is someone who may not experience fear as you have described it instead I would recommend that you would use words such as “one” or “oneself” for example you said “It can kiss your soul with the brush of butterfly wings, or grasp you and shake you till you are thoroughly rattled.” I would say: It can kiss ones soul with the brush of butterfly wings, or grasp and shake oneself until one is thoroughly rattled.” It makes it more open and give a more professional appeal. There is nothing wrong with using you but I personally would recommend against it. I liked your description of fear however; I noticed that you did not say anything about good fears and bad fears. Good fears, for example, would be the fears of something like a snake. One may fear a snake because one could be bitten. Furthermore, there are bad fears such as phobias these fears can send one into a panic attack or hyperventilation. Just a thought. Overall I thought your essay was written very well. You did a good job =) Continue writing.

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