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| Hed in the Cloudz 2008-05-24 ch 1,  | abuseI like how the speaker is steadily outsmarted throughout the poem. It makes for an amusing thirty seconds of reading, and probably also good advice for the new college student! There are a few little "mistakes" (in quotes because they aren't strictly mistakes), though. In the first line of the second stanza, the dash should have two parts, so that it doesn't look like a split word or like you forgot the word "are". Also, in the fourth stanza, the last line seems pretty college-student, until the word "that." Anyone relatively young who grew up speaking English would say "I hope I'll pass!", not "I hope that I will pass!" These things make this poem more forced than most of your other work. --Yna, from the Review Marathon (see the link in my profile...you sick of reading this yet? I'm sure you've been sick of me for quite awhile!) |
| Dorkie 2008-02-08 ch 1, | abuseOh, yes... the problem with buying textbooks online... *sigh* Great... definitely humorous and realistic! |
| simpleplan13 2007-11-16 ch 1, | abuselol.. i can totally relate to this piece... its hysterical and awesome |
| hey maria 2007-09-23 ch 1, | abuseHaha, aw. This reminds me of my sister. |
| chibichoco 2007-09-19 ch 1, | abuseHahaha! That was funny! So sad for the person though. Yeah XD |
| RandoMaia 2007-09-19 ch 1, | abuseOof. I hope this isn't a real-life experience. XD nice one. |
| luv me like no other 2007-09-19 ch 1, | abusecute! i do the same thing online too! lol |
| Lightning Storm 2007-09-19 ch 1, | abusehahahahaha that was hilarious. A guy in my classes did that, he has like 3 of one book and none of a few others because of it all. This poem reminded me of him :P Stupid fuck |