Oh wow, this is just so underdog-like. I mean, in the whole you're-good-but-you-get-overlooked-for-some-reason kinda way. Emotional, maybe a bit angsty, but then again life always gives us good reasons to angst. And don't be offended, I ain't waving your emotions off as just-another-pathetic-angsty-freak stuff; I guess it's kinda my way of saying that you're good.

Heh. And if you're wondering why I put you on Story Alert, read the first paragraph on my profile. :)

konban wa

What I love most about this poem actually is how it works so perfectly with your friend's poem. Especially how she worked off of your wording: "A trident that's in human form" (awesome line, btw). I don't even know what to say; I absolutely love this poem!

ZAijen

-Shan-

"A trident that's in human form"

Excellent line. I like the idea behind this..and I don't think I've ever seen the formatting in which you've made it rhyme before. It's good, real good. :)

Its really quite good. And in answer to the question: yes I do sometimes