I really enjoyed the story. Good job.

You ripped this off from another story. it's called reason and romance, its not exactly the same but the idea is very similar

Great story! I have to say though, that Patrick and James were my favourite characters - even though there was so little scenes with Patrick. *sigh*

Have you given up on James' story? (I just took a look at your profile and it hasn't be updated in ages...) I was looking forward to that...

- Rebekah

There were some fairly cliché moments, but some original ones too. I did enjoy it, and it was well-written.

Thanks for the experience,
Push

I cried when they got into that really big fight but when she said that she loved him I resisted the urge to scream "FINALLY!" because my parents were sleeping.
This was a really well-written story and I really enjoyed reading it.

Nathan threw away a FIVE year olds gifts? He's gone down in my books even more now.

I liked your summary so I went into it kind of expecting the usual but hoping for a little more.
However, 2 chapters in, I got annoyed with their banter, it was overly stereotyped and cliched.
From what I'm reading, it seems the narrator is omnipotent, but the narration seems so one-sided. I guess the only reason may be its more Kaitlin's pov than anything. Anyway, I especially don't like how most of the male characters Ive seen so far have such stereotyically masculinities. Do they always have to be arrogant? (Nathan, James, even David), and do the females have to be so snappy and negative? I would think someone as smart as kaitlin or Hailey would understand the basic ideas of gender typing, which they seem to use so readily?

the writing is good, it's not spectacular but it works for the story. I honestly think it's the characters, maybe further reading will reveal more depth, I'm hoping it isn;t like the other playboy/smart girl stories out there.

Anyway, those are some problems I see, i hope its helped.
keep writing
joey

Oh, this was such a cute story! I really enjoyed it.

oh, interesting...

great story. I loved it. Nice work.

awsome story
really cute
keep it up!

“Scaring boys who kiss you is my duty and right,” Patrick said firmly, oblivious to his wife biting her lip in order to keep herself from laughing. “I’m your father, after all. And now that I’ve learned that our little plan has worked a little too well than we hoped, then I have no choice but to--”
i absolutely loved this!
this sort of foreshadows as to wut will happen when i start dating. but oddly i think my mom n dad wont mind but my older brothers will play that role. :D
n nathan and kaitlin are so cute together
they're mini lil movie moments *sigh*
i hope u write a sequel
i loved the story and i'm definitely adding it to my favs!
i hope to c more of ur stories in the future~

This is really good so far:) I'm excited to read more!:)

Great story, keep up the good work.

interesting start!! i get random urges for some nice light and fluffy reading and tonight i got the urge again. so Ill probably devour your story whole and review again in a few hours. but i really like it so far :)