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| Obsidian Eyes 2007-09-20 ch 1,  | abuseAn interesting subject to write about. You kept me intrigued- write on. Obsidian Eyes |
| Tranquil Thorns 2007-09-20 ch 1, | abuseNicely done. =D Pretty imagery! I loved your lines about smoke on the wind and ocean washing sand. The pictures are vividly captured. For the last line, maybe you can write 'or are they simply gone', instead of 'they're'. The first one sounds more like the concluding question. Anywho, great job! |