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| Purple Thoughts 2007-10-21 ch 1,  | abuseAmusing and quite clever. Interesting choice of POV;I find it tricky to write an all dialogue piece, but you did so while establish age, personality and all the other things which are generally explained, or at least added to, with an expositinal sentence. I particularly liked the line 'She says just knowing is more life-threatening than smoking.' I noticed a couple of typos (for example using 'your' instead of 'you're'), but nothing to distract from the story. Good luck with any future stories or poems! x |