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| My Atomic Garden 2008-07-20 ch 5,  | abuseI like your word choice, every word says so much. I like the end, it shows a sort if determination and just works... Shameless plug:it's review marathon time (link in profile)! -Peace out. |
| My Atomic Garden 2008-07-20 ch 4, | abuseI like your voice here, it is honest and intense. My favourite part is "because I’d rather die then to let you inside." because it is so powerful and shows desparation. |
| My Atomic Garden 2008-07-20 ch 3, | abuseVery beautiful and sad, I like it. I like how you talk about wanting and needing this person to be help and care about you and at the end ask if they trust you to do that for them because it shows two sides. Good work. |
| My Atomic Garden 2008-07-20 ch 2, | abuseI like the parentheses, they separate thoughts well. I like the focusedness of this poem, you stay right on topic and make it very easy to read. |
| My Atomic Garden 2008-07-20 ch 1, | abuseYou expressed your emotions well in this one and thought very deeply, I like when poety makes me think. I like the concept itself, oxymoronic yet so realistic at the same time. Good job. Shameless plug:it's Review Marathon time (link in profile)! |
| Moon-Chaser 2008-07-10 ch 71, | abuseI love this, the way that you describe the situation and the emotive words that you use, suh a good piece of work. Keep it up. |
| Morgan Duriya 2008-07-05 ch 71, | abuseBeautifully so is yet another wonderful addition. I can feel the strength in your voice as well as the weekness. The dialogue really adds to what you are trying to convey. |
| Moon-Chaser 2008-06-24 ch 70, | abuseInteresting, I really like the ending to this one. Keep it up. |
| Moon-Chaser 2008-06-11 ch 69, | abuseOh my damn, such imagery you inspire. I love the way that you have written this, almost got an evil Alice in Wonderland feel with the looking glass...don't know why I thought of that though. Keep it up. I think that everything is in the way that reader interprets it, and for me you really speak to how I feel in the moment. |
| Moon-Chaser 2008-06-05 ch 68, | abuseOh interesting questions, your work is always so insightful. I believe there is forgiveness from other people but it means nothing until you can forgive yourself. Keep it up. |
| Moon-Chaser 2008-05-24 ch 67, | abuseI love this! Real life never does seem to live up to the hype does it? I like the way you did the first and last lines similar. Keep it up. |
| Moon-Chaser 2008-05-17 ch 66, | abuseI love this, I love everything you write in these chapters! The ending of this is just so strong. Keep it up. |
| Moon-Chaser 2008-05-17 ch 65, | abuseI love this, it sounds like something that you really want. I love when you wrote "...and, god, am I ever hoping you break." I really loved that! Keep it up. |
| Moon-Chaser 2008-04-18 ch 64, | abuseOh my goodness! I swear that you are in my head right now. I have been feeling this way for so long! I am so tempted to print this out and shout at everyone that this is how I feel. You must read minds girl because this is how I feel. I love this. Keep it up. |
| Moon-Chaser 2008-04-18 ch 63, | abuseI really like this, comparing everything to an electric circuit. I really love the way that you write. Keep it up. |