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| .'.'.- Desert - Moon -.'.'. 2007-11-07 ch 3,  | abuseI must say Amazing so far, and very descriptive. Although one small part in the third chapter is a bit confusing. Were bruce confronts her about taking the plastic of the mature manga. "“Oh? So, you’ve never taken the plastic off of the mature manga?” 'She' asked, snarling like a serpent." |
| Tehkestrel 2007-09-21 ch 2, | abusewow your writing is really good. I was interested through both chapters. and i really like the quotes at the beginning. There are a few slightly misspelled words probaby just from typing too fast. Anywhoo keep up the sweet story. |
| Cerulean Lee 2007-09-21 ch 1, | abuseGreat story! The narration has a subtle tension to it thoughout, and you've got some clever descriptions. I laughed at the introduction to the rope. Hope to see the next chapter soon. |