Reviews for Consequences of a Happy Ending

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Klutzilla 2008-05-14 ch 9,	abuseAw...that was pretty awesome! I wonder what's going to happen next. Dun dun duN!
SirScott 2008-05-14 ch 2,	abuseIan seems kinda freaky. Keep up the good work. ~SirScott
SirScott 2008-05-14 ch 1,	abuseIntresting beginning. I guess nobody's life is perfect. ~SirScott
AutumnRain16 2008-05-10 ch 1,	abuseI really like the beginning of this...I really like the detail and the character development so far...and I know I'm not supposed to judge the story on the prologue wink wink but I'm going to anyway and say that I look forward to reading more of it! One quick thing though...isn't Erin that is a boy supposed to be Aaron? Other than that...I think that this is great!
Klutzilla 2008-03-08 ch 7,	abuseThis was an enjoyable chapter to read. :) They are so sweet together. I usually don't read luvvy duvvy stuff like this, but this is pretty good. :)
Hoodwynk 2008-03-04 ch 7,	abuseCharity with competition? That is definately a new plot element. I like the theme that appearances don't matter- luck of the draw. People are very creul
J Paine 2008-03-01 ch 2, anon.	abuseDid you miss me? I thought I'd just do an anonymous review since I don't even use my account very much. I LOVE the new chapter! It's amazing! I sort of like the girl character, and I find your diologue intriguing. I won't be updating anymore. I'd just thought I'd add that as an afternote. My parents don't like me posting work on the internet, they'd probably even be ** at me for doing this. Keep up the good work, you've gotten so popular!!
Hoodwynk 2008-02-26 ch 6,	abuseIf I hadn't read the author's note, it would have kind of felt like someone wanted her to escape( like it was supposed to be odd). I like the guilt of Rainer and Caine, as well as the Ivory Health subplot. The gov. is getting way out of control- in fiction and in real life. Nice job.
Klutzilla 2008-02-23 ch 6,	abuseTHis so far has been my favorite chapter! :) Caine sounds so hot. lol. I'm weird, well good job and please update soon!
rust phoenix 2008-01-30 ch 5,	abuseAnother great chapter. I like the dialogue, it definitely gives an impression as to how the characters act. I also like the details in Ashlees POV like the references to "good cop, bad cop" and how she's never claimed to be sane. It really makes her sound like a real teenager. I would like to know why she thought she was in a warehouse, and you don't need to use so many synonyms for "said" but all in all an excellent chapter. This story is getting quite interesting.
rust phoenix 2008-01-30 ch 4,	abuseHi, sorry I haven't reviewed in a while. Things have been complicated. Anyway... I really liked this chapter. It's been a while since I read the previous ones, so I can't compare extensively, but I do know that if they had been this good I would definitely have remembered. Your characters are very interesting people - you've given them depth and ambiguity rather than making them cliches. Your narration has a sense of subtlety to it that I don't think was there before, and it works wonderfully. Caine's comment that she couldn't be too horrible because of her family situation bothered me (this isn't a criticism, by the way - it's his opinion, not necessarily your own, and it does give some sense to his character). I realize that people who grow up with stable parents tend to be more well-adjusted on average, but I know people who come from family problems and are still normal, friendly people, and I'm sure the vise-versa is also true in some cases. There comes an age where people have to take responsibility for themselves, and it looks like Caine just blames his father. I'm rambling. But this is really good writing. It keeps me thinking and drawing conclusions about the characters. The pacing is good, and there are more descriptions than I remember. You've got an enjoyable writing style, and I look forward to seeing what happens next and how you continue to develop as a writer.
kloun doll 2008-01-23 ch 5,	abusethe story is getting different from the beginning, now ashlee is kidnapped, well, I thought it was a joke, this chapter is short... wait you to update soon I wanna know what it's coming.
Hoodwynk 2008-01-15 ch 5,	abuseI liked how you focased on the relationship between Caine and Rainer for a bit as well as Ivory. Nice chapter.
Hoodwynk 2008-01-15 ch 4,	abuseI think you self-criticisms were a bit too strong. Although you didn't exactly bring the charies into better difinition, you didn't act against their charies. Cool chapter.
Hoodwynk 2008-01-15 ch 3,	abuseGreat that Caine had a sucessful facade- and the resurfacing history.

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