 Grey Lemaire 2009-01-29 . chapter 1Ho. Ly. Shit.
This is beautiful! I know it's such a corny thing to say when you're reviewing someone's poem, but you summed me up perfectly so I'm predisposed to loving this. Even if I wasn't though, you're language and metaphors are stunning. The first line in particular is fabulous.
Keep on writing! |
 fairytale failure 2008-11-13 . chapter 1I love how you compare a girl to a chandelier, especially the part in brackets - it is a great extension of the metaphor. I find the dialogue a little hard to follow, though. |
 sorryaboutthat 2008-03-20 . chapter 1Even with the sense of fantasy, or maybe unreality is a better word, this ENTIRE poem captures an instant in such a way that it's breath taking. Usually I pick out favorite lines, but I just can't with this one, I love it all.
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 Kissing Concrete 2008-02-17 . chapter 1right out of a distorted action fantasy movie, as i could see. i loved it. |
 sylvia's syndrome 2007-12-25 . chapter 1This is impressive and enchanting. I loved every word of this piece. You’ve done an excellent job developing the metaphor of the chandelier. The images in this are as sharp and glittering as broken glass. And those last few lines were perfect. I admire and envy the way you write. Your words have real weight and really transport the reader. You have immense talent and are headed for my favorite authors list. Thank you for sharing this piece and your gift with us. |
 no.peace.los.angeles 2007-11-08 . chapter 1This is just gorgeous. I love the comparison of a girl to glass, all these traits they both possess. The last two lines are just perfection. So nicely done. Keep writing! :) |
 Nobody-n-Particular 2007-09-24 . chapter 1M, I love the transition of imagery in this, and how you stay true to your motif of glass down to subtle expression. Quite intriguing, what I see in my mind's eye. It definitely casts a new perspective on a human condition. Lovely. |
 concerto49 2007-09-21 . chapter 1Hm, I liked the description - different and vivid.
It's strong even with the little words.
Ha, the ending was cool too.
Anyhow. Cheers. |
 Kindre Turnany 2007-09-21 . chapter 1Erm, wow. I loved it. You've made my night even if the rest I find is... not so good. |
 Kicking Poe 2007-09-21 . chapter 1incredibly beautiful, tragic, and delicate. I love the last few lines. cheers. |
 Michael l'oeil fol 2007-09-21 . chapter 1wonderfully vivid images...great flow...love the ending...thought provoking and makes anyone who has known anyone so narcissistic grin to themselves...good work
Michael |
 she's so hardcore 2007-09-21 . chapter 1I love this. There's so much depth and meaning to it; it's a great piece.
~j. lynn |