Reviews for one less star for wishing

Reviews For: one less star for wishing

stained blue 2008-05-29 ch 1,	abusei like the way you ended it, the last two lines it makes me think of stephen king somehow, & it's beautiful. the way you describe your "charecters" is something most people can't do, mygod.
A Minion Named Onion 2008-01-18 ch 1,	abusewhoa..."laughs like Marilyn's hemline" never have i thought of hemlines laughing but now that i've read that i will think of this poem every time i see that picture. it's the only thing her hemline can now do for me, because you have made it so. i'm an eternal fan here.
Alicia Marianne 2007-10-15 ch 1, anon.	abuseyour stories are just as amazing as ever. i love what you write, as it is dep and demands alot of thinking to understand. you have managed to become truly accomplished at writing: your words have a thousand meanings, and it is up to the reader to discover what the real one is. thank you for writing.
B. M. Reed 2007-10-12 ch 1,	abuseAwesome poem. Your use of punctuation is very interesting and unique.
Stella Grimshaw. 2007-10-10 ch 1,	abuseI really liked your setup of the poem, it's much more powerful and impacting, I can't really recommend any changes because honestly I wouldn't change a thing.
Hide Your Eyes 2007-10-07 ch 1,	abusehell, even her fingernails are fake, tiny rhinestones winking at her until she nips them off between her teeth. that bit just makes it incredible for me. this is so excellent.
cocaine and cherries 2007-10-04 ch 1,	abusei just got a really bad cold chill. i've been thinking like this for days. "God is cruel, baby," and kisses you slow --like decay. --like denial. when she's drunk she Runs her words together. Savior safehere saveher. word games. her games. ha-ha, you lose. (there is no winning, you know?)
breakdown in the waiting ro... 2007-09-27 ch 1,	abusei love you. and your words.
she smolders 2007-09-24 ch 1,	abuseThe abstract way you form your lines is like music and the comma in the beginning made me feel like a was witnessing this poem-story firsthand. I think it's the second-last verse that will remain the most in my mind though, the way you have with words is just amazing.
from beneath the bell jar 2007-09-23 ch 1,	abuseWow amazing. I would love to know what inspired this. The most amazing line was "she laughs like Marilyn's hemline. flirty. soft. manufactured." Very clever. Well crafted - I like the format. Lots of great imagery as well. Great piece.
no.peace.los.angeles 2007-09-23 ch 1,	abuseWow, this is intoxicating. I love comparing her laugh to Marilyn's hemline - that's so original, it fits the tone of the poem, and the description worked. So fantastic. Keep writing! :)
xrho 2007-09-23 ch 1,	abuseWow. Start to finish - just amazing. Kudos. I'm glad you reviewed me. I never would have found this, otherwise.
love between the radio stat... 2007-09-22 ch 1,	abusei miss this kind of torn apart beauty like it's oxygen. i AM denial, embodied. that much i know is true, love.
fairytale failure 2007-09-22 ch 1,	abuseI love how you started with a comma; it really made this piece feel as if it were a moment of time, a continuation of what came before. You used really good description and similes, especially the part about her laugh. Although I know you were talking about games, the ending (haha, you lose) doesn't really seem to fit to me.

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