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something i can never have
2007-09-22
ch 1,
abuseThis is a really interesting, moving and insightful piece. I really enjoyed reading it, its a refreshing break from the usual reading that you find on fictionpress. However, I did pick up a few minor errors, mostly spelling mistakes. I hope you don't mind my pointing them out to you.

"They brake* and bleed and never quite heal."
* should be 'break'

"Leaving pinker softer flesh marred by innosence* and naivety."
* should be innocence

"Eventually they will heal with proper care and disapear*. Maybe later to reapear** and destroy you yet again."
*should be disappear
**should be reappear

"Such words do not carry the connotation of what it was* we did."
*should be 'what it was that we did'

"What we did had nothing to do with being closer* or affection**."
*should be close
** should be affectionate

"It was more like volentary* rape."
*should be voluntary

Well done.
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