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| something i can never have 2007-09-22 ch 1,  | abuseThis is a really interesting, moving and insightful piece. I really enjoyed reading it, its a refreshing break from the usual reading that you find on fictionpress. However, I did pick up a few minor errors, mostly spelling mistakes. I hope you don't mind my pointing them out to you. "They brake* and bleed and never quite heal." * should be 'break' "Leaving pinker softer flesh marred by innosence* and naivety." * should be innocence "Eventually they will heal with proper care and disapear*. Maybe later to reapear** and destroy you yet again." *should be disappear **should be reappear "Such words do not carry the connotation of what it was* we did." *should be 'what it was that we did' "What we did had nothing to do with being closer* or affection**." *should be close ** should be affectionate "It was more like volentary* rape." *should be voluntary Well done. |