second story i've read from you -- i really liked orchid this one is pretty good too, I like the way you write and the pleasant twist at the end but what stands out for me are maybe working with slightly more original material?? (which was what i saw more in orchid but dont trust my opinoin for it)

you seem to really like working with the micro -- the whole smaller things that happen in peoples lives which is neat for a oneshot

what i'd realli like to see you is maybe an expanding of ideas?and try somethign longer than a one shot too (you'd probably get more reviews too hehe), and develop characters better, theyre a lot of work im assuming (i've never written one myself though)