Very interesting idea. I wasn't sure where you were going with the first few paragraphs, but I'm glad I read on because everything came together in the end.

You write very poetically.

wow i really liked this story! great descriptions and a really interesting twist/concept, I like how you used the preconceived idea of something which is meant to 'wrong' but made ur main character someone identifiable and the last line was brilliant!

at first i was a little unsure about ur description of Eve -- i thought u were being a bit stereotypical of your portrayal of her as an evil person for committing the sin, an outcast of God etcetc (why do i sound feminist -- im a guy for gods sake!)-- but again the end made up for it

--cheers James

Wow. wow. seriously, i really love your stuff. it's so good! this story is no exception. i love the world you have created here, and the emotions you can invoke. i hope i'm not starting to sound creepy, because truly i am not trying to. I just love your writing style. Keep it up!