'Ello Guv!
This be a mighty good poem. If you don't mind me being a triffle picky. I would suggest yo make your lines prehaps a little longer? But it twas a bloody good poem anyways. Have fun writing ya poetry, your lucky you can write 'em so good.
Catcha later I will be,
Emma

I'd hate to assume because i'll probably end up being 100% wrong, but did you write this while you were literally in the moment? Like right as you were just getting some alone time after having the experience that inspired this poem? I hope i'm not being rude, but I thought the poem felt a little insincere. Kind of like you remembered the emotion from a past experience and wanted to write about it, but didnt acually get the chance to, until sometime later. Or that you wanted to write about love and tried to put it in words. I think you should re-write this and you'd be able to take it to the next level. I think you have the talent, but left out a lot of deep emotion. Happy writing!

Well, here is a review for ya, but I'm not sure you will want it.

This was boring. The word choice and subject was cliche. You said something that has been said a million and one times. My advice is to explore your own creativity. Look at your poems and see places where you could tuck in a little imagination. Keep writing.