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| simpleplan13 2007-12-13 ch 1,  | abuseI think the rhyming is good... I love the whole idea of the stars thing.. its wonderful |
| kth 2007-11-16 ch 1, anon. | abuseInteresting rhythm and theme to the poem... sorry I haven't reviewed before this. I like "stars that are young or antique", that sounds very cool... it reminds me much more of some sort of song or something that should have pictures with it though. And you haven't updated in 2 months, you have to put up your nanowrimo story!! -kth |
| sharva-sundari 2007-10-29 ch 1, | abuseBefore I begin my review...does that Twilight Starr person always write that? Its really weird and is getting on my nerves. Anyway, your poem has a good approach to actually being a poem (not trying to offend you or anything because my peoms are WAY worse then yours), but I didn't really get the feel of it. You had good lines, but some of them kinda don't go with the whole theme of the peom (in my opinion). But, I like the whole contrasting aspect of it, the title and the gentle description of the stars and wings and stuff...it ends in an intersting way...describing the stars but juxtaposing the title as well. I like that..well done. I'll try to write more so then you can review...not that you would want to because my writing stinks...but if you were EXTREMELY bored and had nothing else to do. |
| Twilight Starr 2007-10-21 ch 1, | abuseGreat poem. Good luck with poetry and life. Have a brilliant day. ~Twilight Starr~ |