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| Mireille Caelarily 2007-09-22 ch 1,  | abuseBeautiful, descriptive, enrapturing, as always. And the last line made me breathe again - to sigh. I really liked the line "Dust makes smoke ribbons" for some reason. It's just...every word is significant. Each word has meaning. And I like poetry like that. As usual, lovely. :) |
| ladygirl1324 2007-09-22 ch 1, | abusebeautiful and poetic. i like the ending, where she's dirtied her feet after all of the cleansing and the spiritual growth, because it's ironic. and for me, irony = smiles. :) |