Gah, hck, what?! *sputtersputter* It was all a game?! Forget what I said last review, the characters make sense all of a sudden. Gods plus chess equals disaster. Good thing to keep in mind. The last part 'inside the game' made sense too. Kights and bishops, kings and queens, chess; very clever...

So much so that I'm favoriting this.

Interesting so far... the beginning had me confused at first, but I want to see how the crazy brother deals with his 'gifted' brother and vice versa. To tell the truth, the personalities seem a little cliche, but then again, cliches can't become cliches unless there are people who fill the role so...

This is fantastic.

The ending is extraordinarily creative.
I love the way that you make the reader feel that they understand what is going on in the story, and then end it with something entirely different than anyone would expect.

Good job. Maybe more in-depth action scenes? It could make a great longer story too.

I read your profile thing and found out that you wanted me to read this, so I did. :) It's very good. Kind of confusing at the end of part 2, but that's probably intentional, so yah. Leaving us hanging. :) Good JOB! I can't really find anything wrong with...anything. Looking forward to reading more.

WOAH!? So that was either a game of chess or I've really gone off on a tangent, anyway, this was good I liked it, but one thing is you go quite fas through a few scenes i thought you could've perhaps spent a bit more time on e.g Catherines death, some of the fights, anyway toher than that good job, ohh an thanks for your reviews xD

This is a nice start, and it's interesting, good job so far, I'd like to see where it leads

A really good start, definitely going on my favorites list!