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Caecandy 2008-06-25 ch 1,	abuseI like the idea, it makes you think. The purpose we're trying to get across is lost in the transcription. I really like this line. you remind me of him of verbose and verbatim
Tytherpol 2007-12-01 ch 1,	abusei like how personal this was. even though first person means v little, "used too many words to make my point and lost it which was the idea I meant to get to the whole time" said a lot to me. actually, i'm not really sure what is going on in this piece. and the shakespeare allusion sort of added a lot more to me than maybe you intended it to. i guess it described to me women's role in revolutions. but, again, this one was hard. "you remind me of him" was a great line in this poem. and so is the conclusion. the conclusion simply owns. and it really gives the feel of the 'calm before the storm' great job. yours, -ty.
xrho 2007-10-02 ch 1,	abuseWow. I'm glad I found my way back to these poems again, because I'm sure I must have looked at this before, and not really read it (the curse of fictionpress, sadly) and it's absolutely amazing. I loved it all, but especially the first two stanzas, the Hamlet stanza, and the last stanza, as well as the line "...verbose and verbatim / colour..." and "I am still in your head". There's a peculiar rhythm and flow to this poem, a little disjointed, and entirely complementary to the content. I love the way you play with and /use/ language. Hehe. I'll shut up now. Great work, glad I got back to it.