|Reviews for bay|
| My Dear Adora 6/25/08 . chapter 1
I like the idea, it makes you think.
The purpose we're trying to get across is lost in the transcription.
I really like this line.
you remind me of him
of verbose and verbatim
| Tytherpol 12/1/07 . chapter 1
i like how personal this was.
even though first person means v little,
"used too many words
to make my point and lost it
which was the idea
I meant to get to the whole time"
said a lot to me.
actually, i'm not really sure what is going on in this piece.
and the shakespeare allusion sort of added a lot more to me
than maybe you intended it to.
i guess it described to me women's role in revolutions.
but, again, this one was hard. "you remind me of him" was a great line in this poem.
and so is the conclusion.
the conclusion simply owns. and it really gives the feel of the 'calm before the storm'
| paradisgatan 10/2/07 . chapter 1
Wow. I'm glad I found my way back to these poems again, because I'm sure I must have looked at this before, and not really read it (the curse of fictionpress, sadly) and it's absolutely amazing.
I loved it all, but especially the first two stanzas, the Hamlet stanza, and the last stanza, as well as the line "...verbose and verbatim / colour..." and "I am still in your head". There's a peculiar rhythm and flow to this poem, a little disjointed, and entirely complementary to the content. I love the way you play with and /use/ language. Hehe. I'll shut up now. Great work, glad I got back to it.