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| Imagine Nation 2008-03-14 ch 1,   | This is amazing. This entire poem was just so strong, and it was a bit more meaningful to me because I was in a situation like that once. Amazing! ^_^ |
| this young lady 2007-12-17 ch 1, | I totally, totally wish I had written this haha. So utterly beautiful in every way. |
| Professional Dreamer 2007-10-15 ch 1, | That's beautiful. It's femslash, but not for the sake of being femslash, and I like that. You make a wonderful dance with the words, and I love the continued metaphor of a puppet - always being manipulated and being the weaker in a relationship. It's true, some people get hooked on this way of being in love. It's destructive, but there is an allure to it. You portrayed it very well. |
| bittersweet.season 2007-10-06 ch 1, | oh...wow. there's something about the poetry I'm reading tonight that's taking my breath away. the whole thing is gorgeous, more than your usual. the part about strings and the fourth stanza. I want to love this like a child that is not mine. Amazing. |
| Dreamless_Infinity 2007-10-01 ch 1, | Beautiful. I like how you’ve reached different levels. How she trust her, but then pulls herself from that bond and points out her errors. The parts of betrayal, to me, stick out. ‘I am addicted to a pill called betrayal But darling, darling, intoxication can only last so long. The flame of desire turns to one of hate; The neglected marionette gazes with baleful eyes. You bought me with words, but I leave you with silence Loud enough to echo forever in your ears.’ You have a way with free verse… I’ll have to finish reading the rest of your poems. ~Dreamless~ |
| she smolders 2007-09-24 ch 1, | I just adore these lines: "Who hands her foolish heart to beautiful girls/ Who enjoy dismantling it piece by piece." & "I am addicted to a pill called betrayal" You write with such conviction and emotion that makes each word resonate in my mind. Take care. |
| it's not your fault 2007-09-23 ch 1, | this is so striking and powerful - it's impossible to not read from start to finish. detailed to the point of perfection. i love this - absolutely love it. |
| Xerophyte 2007-09-23 ch 1, | Wow. This piece is definately woven together very tightly. It's great. It truly tells the story so specific to you, but so universal that I could relate to it (I am "that little masochist who hands her heart to beautiful girls"). I really cannot think of any critique for this--it's simply a great poem. |
| Gemma Lovell 2007-09-23 ch 1, | That's intensely amazing. I congratulate you on your brilliance. GREAT job, keep it up!! ~Gemma |