That is really good. It makes me feel bad though. = (

wow, this is an awesome poem. I love it. Keep it up.
Faith

I really like the first stanza—it’s perfect. It suggests so much and yet leaves a lot of room for thought. And while I see that you wanted this to be rough and bare and maybe even a little shocking, I think that your diction could have been more artistic and still just as rough. I guess it just got a little to matter-of-fact sounding for my taste. However, this is an excellent piece on the whole and I really enjoyed it. Keep up the good work!