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| Quill of Copper 2008-02-07 ch 1,  | abusenot bad -- but I found kinda wierd (like u said lol ^^) |
| SilverTwilight 2007-12-02 ch 1, | abuseOoh! I vote shot on sight. Kidding. The idea was original, and gripping. I think your writing style could have used a little more detail. It's worth continuing. ~ Dx |
| Nemonus 2007-09-24 ch 1, | abuseYour prose is pretty good. It flows well enough and your word choice is apt. I especially like "porcine" for the demon in the beginning. They're creepy, the demons. It's not a perfect work: you've got some extra commas as in "dragon wings were, about eighteen feet". However, your disclaimer about being new is understandable so I won't nitpick. |