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RoseMage 2008-07-23 ch 6,	abuseooh. love this so far. the setting is brilliant, the very quiet moments when he is 'ghost boy' and the contrast between them and him working in the kitchen...great. Really like Ryan, too. ~Katie
MUMSI 2008-07-05 ch 6,	abuseplaya' playa'. seems you own another story that belongs on my favorites list. you gangsta'. urgh. my heart hurts for Alf. your imagery is fantastic. i feel like i'm breathing in the dankness of the place. his hurt is my hurt. thus you are a pimp. god. i want this kid to get out. i also want him to kick that french douche in le balls. also, how you set up the the scenery is just fantastic. whatever playa', you own.
WOW 2008-06-25 ch 1, anon.	abuseI love this so much, can't believe it doesn't have more reviews. Makes me glad I don't work in a cafe, haha. ^^ Noticed you haven't updated in a while, this isn't abandoned is it?! Anyway, I really hope you continue this cause it's really different to a lot of fics out there, really nice to read.
Liviania 2008-06-10 ch 6,	abuseI like this story. Poor, socially awkward Alf. When I went to buy ticky tack to hang posters in my dorm all they had was this off-brand white stuff that barely worked. (Of all things, why that caught my attention . . . ) I think I'm glad I don't work at a restaurant. Livi
CrayonMentality 2008-06-07 ch 6,	abuseIt's not fair that you write another story for me to become addicted to! ^_~ Really good to see Alf sticking up for himself, and the depression is fascinating to watch. Hopefully someone will notice something and help him.
InSilverShadows 2008-05-27 ch 6,	abuseAs a writer of 'slow-moving' plots in slash stories, I don't think there's anything wrong with it. I think stories don't always need to be swashbuckling action or steamy sex to be interesting, and slow plots allow for complex characterization. I have a lot to say for this--it's beautifully written and it is by far my favorite of all your stories. I love your ways of phrasing things and your way of storytelling, and I need not tell you your dialogue is sharp and realistic. I think Alf feels a little confused to me--although I like him, he seems a little thin, and a little all over the place with his characterization. It's realistic to a point, but it makes him a little unpredictable. I love him at the same time that sometimes I don't get what he's doing or feel he's a little out of order. I don't know. It adds to the feel of the story a bit, but it still makes my head spin a little. You use restaurant jargon expertly, and the feeling of your setting is very, very realistic and easy. I can see it all playing out like a movie, and though they use restaurant terms, it's not at all confusing. I read a story about bridge once (the card game) and the terminology was so confusing! I really love this in the end. The whole story is interesting and intricate, and very beautiful. Don't lose heart on it because it's 'slow', because I really feel it's the best of all your stuff. Keep writing. I'd be happy to talk further with you, but I think I've blabbed enough. :P
Vera Dicere 2008-04-25 ch 6,	abusei really like the style of this- it's first person, but kind of short hand in the way alf describes situations. he's a really intriguing character. and i'm kind of in love with ryan. :) ps- added the story to my alerts.
mandraco 2008-04-25 ch 6,	abuseI actually read this a couple of days ago, but didn't have time to review, but I've read it again and properly now. One thing that bugged me about this chapter, that hadn't in the previous ones, even though I'm pretty sure you did it is the change in... I'm not sure what you call it. Perspectives. Like mostly it's Alf in first person saying "I" and so forth, then in the very next sentence he's referring to himself as "you"... unless this actually means something. It's this line in particular: "Want to make his espresso so I can spit in it. Never thought you’d have the guts, but you’re getting close." Because it really sounds like he's talking to himself... rather than just... talking to himself... I'm not sure how to explain it. I guess it's a bit like the difference between talking to yourself when you're insane and normal people talking to themselves. Lol. Because if it's in separate paragraphs it doesn't bug me... though maybe you're getting at Alf having a split personality or something like that... Story-wise: I did like the little town legends, and further evidence that pretty much everyone in this story is a bastard. =) Mandraco.
Huey 2008-04-22 ch 6, anon.	abuseI quite liked the legend part. I was a little taken aback when it was revealed that the segment was about Alf's dad, just cause he talked about it in such a detached manner. Quite fond of the ending too. He's finally getting some gumption =). Looking forward to the continuation!
LandUnderWave 2008-04-22 ch 6,	abuseMy favourite bit in this chapter is probably the little 'legend' about Alf's parents. And the 'doggie' thing, for some reason. :D And my review is almost as delayed as your chapter. Relative to my normal reviewing speed, it's worse...so I win. Hah. And Xavier's face, as well as Ryan's, has got to be brilliant. ~Lilz(who is thinking of calling herself Anka now)
CaFFy 2008-04-21 ch 6,	abuseDoes Xavier do... anything?
CaFFy 2008-04-21 ch 5,	abuse-smacks Xavier-
CaFFy 2008-04-21 ch 3,	abuseo.o I dont mind him slitting his wrists. o-o;
CaFFy 2008-04-21 ch 2,	abuseo.O The writing style is really... interesting. Different. -continues reading-
Feel The Waltz 2008-04-21 ch 6,	abuseI don't know where this story is going & i love that :D Kudos on the speedier update. Makes me happy ^_^

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