Very nice story! I love Hatshepsut, and you describe everything rather well =]

Very cool story! Does she become the Lord of Two Lands. You did good in desribing her feelings, but tell what she was like. How old was Thutmose I? What time peroid did they rule in because a lot of people don't know about Thutmose II to grasp the story's plot. Other than that, it was a cool story! Rock on!