 Written 2008-03-20 . chapter 1wow! great last stanza- it really stands out but also ties everything together. I love the fact that I can't figure out what 'It' is either.
well done! |
 AuraBorealis 2007-11-16 . chapter 1nice work |
 MetalCloud 2007-11-09 . chapter 1Oh my god. Oh my god. Why is it I am always left speechless with awe at your writing? Usually, I can't shut up. You have a gift here. |
 Twilight Starr 2007-11-07 . chapter 1Sad, well written poem.
~Twilight Starr~ |
 InkySubstance 2007-09-30 . chapter 1I really enjoyed reading this, especially the last two lines. |
 Julian Laverne 2007-09-27 . chapter 1There is really something about this piece that is very interesting. The personification of this mysterious force seems to lead to a more metaphorical allegory that really keeps the reader in wondering what it is. The structure in the stanzas is very appropriate-each line seems to be sewn into the next. The last stanza is very prolonging; something about it really seems to last in your mind. I really like it, very contemporary. |