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| EmeraldsAndPearls33 2008-01-12 ch 1, | abuseThis is lovely! I can imagine an illustrated book based on this poem, or a full-length story. For some reason, I really like this. It has the charm of one of Aesop's fables, crossed with Robin Hood. Excellent! Em |
| B. M. Reed 2007-11-06 ch 1, | abuseThis is a very cute poem. I like the rhyming, very perfect for a kids' poem. |
| Ivory Taint 2007-10-20 ch 1, | abuseI don't really notice any revisions, but it's still a good poem. ^_^ By the way, we haven't talked in FOREVER. That will have to change soon. -nods- :D |
| Burnt Bread 2007-10-02 ch 1, | abuseYes! Got the alert for this when it was re-posted. I like the way you set it up in the beginning 'I've seen him, you know...', it's like one of those stories that begin with 'this happened to a friend of a friend of mine...'. Then the repetition of the last line brings a cheery structure to the poem. Ending is perfect. It's one of my all time favourite poems ever (and I know all time and ever say the same thing, but I just meant to stress that it's a very cute poem). Best of luck for where ever you go with this! Bread |
| LadyWhen, 2007-09-28 ch 1, anon. | abuseThis is cute :) I like it. It has sort of a bouncy rhythm to it that I think kids would enjoy. |