Great writing with the potential to go far. Since it does have that potential, I’m sure you won’t mind some concrit:

Check those typos :P

Your piece is brilliant, but the constant use of bold/italics or excessive spacing or brackets/commas spoils it and detracts from the poem. Your poem should emphasise itself, you shouldn’t need word to do it for you.

Thank you for posting this! Maybe you wouldn’t mind checking out a few of my writings too if you feel like it and liked the review? If you do, I recommend my rants. I hope the concrit helped!

Sakura.

[Yes, I copy/paste most of my reviews. So sue me. The concrit changes per review, and you get tips, right? Win/win situation. End of.]

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This has a natural, focused flow to it. I especially like the first two stanzas. For some reason, the next to last stanza did not come across as strongly as the rest, but other than a couple typos, it's a good poem.

I like this. It made me grin. Especially the second stanza.