Awesome! I really liked this!

hey, this is alokin from yalime alokin... i saw this on top of the just in list and i was like, whoa, betamaster! i have to read it! and i'm glad i did!

I like how there's this vague kind of... almost a mist hanging around this story... how you can tell what's going on, but it's a bit hard to make out...

it's a scary idea, tho, some kind of being that could destroy us all in an instant...

i can't find anything wrong with it, really, the only thing i could say you could improve on is it's a little wordy (?) but *I* have no place saying THAT to anybody. :D

anyways, i really like it, adding to my faves!