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| Tytherpol 2008-01-12 ch 1,  | abuseincredible. it has this receiving honesty that i will probably never obtain. both the opening and the closing are very strong. sweet. |
| cling peach 2007-10-22 ch 1, | abuse"it could just be the smoke from the fire that likes to coyly stick to my skin and hair but i let them see that i’m a little broken too." this is lovely. reality was never so pretty. |
| fairytale failure 2007-10-13 ch 1, | abuseyou have an amazing talent...the way you write makes the reader feel like they can really relate to what you are saying, even though you use some personal details, such as the last stanza. You have captured perfectly the feeling of opening up to people at a summer (or possibly band) camp. |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2007-09-29 ch 1, | abuseOh, wow, this is good! I think what makes it work so well is that element that you ARE writing about your life, and it's so real. I loved "help me forget about a night when the rest of my peers looked human," and then the ending: "not being able to swing across that rope to land safely on a platform." Really nice job with this one. Keep writing! :) |
| diffident 2007-09-25 ch 1, | abuseI like this. Its specificity suits it well. There's something about it, though, that I can't place my finger on. marie |
| t-t-t-ouch. 2007-09-25 ch 1, | abuseI really really like this. Bravo. |