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| admit it.you luv me 2007-12-26 ch 16,  | abusewow...this wuz a nice stry!! >_ |
| hanalei 2007-12-23 ch 1, | abuseI really liked that story! For a moment I thought that Raine and Ares wouldn't get to be together! Keep up the good work and I'll be waiting to read more of your other stories! kalei |
| Punksheep 2007-09-28 ch 13, | abuseI agree gradious armon, lots of dialogue but not enough detail, which i find surprising because it seems like all i ever say to people on here is that they have TO MUCH detail. but you need more. i also saw some spelling errors in a couple of your chapters. and of course, the shortness of the chapters is still an issue for me. i mean, if you put the first 5 together that would be a pretty decent sized chapter, what got me though was the annoyance of having to click so much to get to every chapter that wasnt even worth clicking because there were only a few paragraphs in it. the story is still pretty good but as the person below me said, poor execution :/ ill still be watching for more chapters though. |
| Gradius Armon 2007-09-26 ch 11, | abuseNicely done. I love the contrast in the story, a prim and proper priestess and a villianous vamp. Great concept, but slightly poor execution. Take the time to add detail to the story, you'll be suprised at how much it can change the story. Trust me, more detail and less dialouge. Keep up the good work. Grad |
| Punksheep 2007-09-26 ch 1, | abuseWell, it intrigues me, but i think the short amount of text does not allow me to have an opinion on the story yet xD so i shall be watching for more. and also: "the next solution was to rest until he could was strong enough to find blood. As he head slumped over, he could smell the blood better now along with the scent of springtime flowers." Might want to fix those error's ~.^ |