Like you said, not your best. Very disjointed and incoherent.

But looking at each line individually, you have some very interesting phrases. The first one in particular I really liked.

[the horizon bleeds:] Very beautiful and vivid image.

~Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)

I don't like the last line--I didn't get it at all. Maybe it's the syllable count again, or maybe it's ust me (very likely, reading and reviewing so much stuff can really mess with your brain @.@)

However, your descriptions worked very well. Without looking at the title, it just sounds beautiful; you can hardly tell how dark it really is.

Wow, wonderful use of formatting. Very creative, yet restraining.

Your whole analogy is wonderful as well. I doubt many people have compared freckles to constilations, and you expanded and described it well.

And the last line: perfect. Emotional and somewhat funny; overall a nice way to wrap this up.

Nice job conveying this meaning. It's clearly about a relationship, but you phrased it in a way that makes you think a little bit.

I'm not too crazy about the last line. I understand what you're trying to say, but it just doesn't come across right. Curse those five syllables >.

I like the analogy here. Very creative, and also quite dark.

[shattered on impact] I think "upon" would make more sense, but it's understandable given the syllable count.

~Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)

Wonderful! I really love this one. I'm an art fan. You really captured the image of The Scream by Munch very well. It wasn't garbage! In fact, I thought it went along well with the art style of expressionism. I love how you can portray so many thoughts, emotions, and images in so few words.

Truly awesome. I would have to say so far, though, that Astronomy is my favorite :)

Going in my favs,
Laura

'scream until we have faces' --i just love the idea of that. it's not garbage, and the metaphors are wonderful.

I had to research edvard munch.. he was a very strange man, with a horrible life... but the poem you wrote, was very very good keep it up!

this is beautiful; the metaphor of a girl being the sky. it's infinite.

isn't "our" actually two syllables?

the power in this:
"our lives suspended
like birds caught in barbed wire
shattered on impact"

almost knocked me out of my seat

nice
gj on the haiku

I love this, short and beautiful, esp. the 2nd line with the forget me not blue part.
Beautiful =]

'Pieces of me' i find this a very powerful poem, short but to the point. i love it.

Nice. I like it. I wish I had the patience for haikus..but I don't.