Wow its been so long I had to go through old chapterst to remember what's going on. Good chapter. Depressing but good. Update soon please

Hayzoosfrackingchrist.

you know what sucks reading this? knowing that i will never write anything better. you're amazing.

now- you will NOT make me wait another howmany months for an update. i want aidan saved and i want it NOW.

(please.)

so update soon!

Know what's funny? I just realized that you are exactly right about radiohead :\ I never really realized how their songs, as beautiful as they can be, are uber depressing :|

Hahah.


Anywho :] Glad you didn't die :D Waiting for the next chapter


-Stace :]

My eyes are hurting from reading this on the computer. Too bad this story's not published, I'd buy it. You might want to look into it, find a nice agent and earn yourself some extra money. Anyways, I really like the plot and character development. It's nice to finally see some talent on this site. Keep up the good work!

Just cant wait for your next chapter :)

Yup, Max is a Douche but that ALexis. I knew I hated her for a reason earlier in the story. I cannot wait to see how she (Lillian)gets herself out of this one. I hope she doesn't have to procreate. But I have to ask. Didn't she have to pee all that time she was tied up? Made me want to pee just reading it. Don't keep us waiting so long, we really do miss these characters...

Eh? I don't get it? Is Alexis really with Max or is she with Quinn? Oh that traitor!

Well uhm, I admire Max's torture skills, but I really do hate him, as I must. He's crude and rude and just plain nasty, urgh! I don't know the full extent of his diabolical schemes, but he's out to rule some part of the world and he's doing a pretty damn good job at it so far. :\

Oh well, I have confidence in Aidan and co. They're just brilliant that way. ;P

Glad to have caught up with this story. I think I'll keep up with it until the end, as the characters so far are extremely lovable and their epic adventure quite fun! :D

Velvet.

First lover's quarrel, snickersnicker. :P

Lily should prolly go help Aidan find his parents. Haven't they gotten separated enough? Though, Lily does have a legitimate reason. I just can't imagine which person should win out in the end...

Well, it seems Max has mobilized his forces. Positively dreadful. What will these zombie butt kicking friends do?

I knew it! Aidan is cracked in the head! But I must say, you did an amazing job with his character! :D I've always had a pinch of envy for the writer's who can just delve into the minds of those not quite right in the head and bring that person to life on such animated words.

It's such a primal way that Aidan thinks, how his thoughts form, how he's driven by an instinctual Need for Darko, to see his parents.

It's almost as if he never remembered that he was supposed to grow up and he sort of regressed into a animalistic, lost child like creature.

Purely amazing. I loved it.

Velvet.

Zombies as military agents? Gov is stupid. Real stupid.

Well, that was some nice insight into some very interesting history. And now I know who the Dorchest guy was from the letter Aidan got. Will Aidan find Dorchest's lab? Will Lily help Ralph find equipment to make a cure so they can stop this madness? Will I stop asking questions? I hope not. XD

Velvet.

Aah! D: I accidentally hit the X button instead of the submit button. T.T I don't know why, either.

Oh well, I just wanted to say that I'm glad Lily is okay, though it would have been pretty cool if she did turn into a zombie and like, before she did, she had to go on this quest to stop the government before she completely degenerated into madness and flesh falling off. :P

Also, this chapter was awesome! I loved it, as all the other chapters before it. I'm absolutely loving this story! :D

Haha, waht a nice turn of events. First Aidan slips off and it's like, why?! And then Lily finds him again and wow, I don't know. With this letter, it sort of changes everything.

I still have a feeling Aidan is going to destory this little experiment, but now he must find his family... if they're still alive, of course.

Great turn of events, I love the way the voice has improved, very much more enjoyable to read. I feel now that I am into the story.

Oh, oh, and dayum! I wish I could fall in love with a complete and random stranger while fighting zombies and other such happenings... Lily prolly just has skillz. :P

Well... that was rather unexpected. Pretty cool! Aah, so where did dear old Ralph head off to? His boss? What is he going to say?

Oh God! Is Aidan trying to stop this experiment?! Is that what he's doing?! WTF... That's some bad ass rebel fighting right there. Freedom fighters, FTW!

Well, now that that revelation has passed, I must continue on to see how things go about with these two now that the secret is out.

I don't know if my last chapter was left, I don't think it was. :P Oh well, I will review here cause this was a rather interesting chapter.

Aiden is a little strange, I don't know how many times I'm going to find myself saying that, but he is. A higher calling? Is he going to rule the zombie world? What's with him? Why did he look back at Ralph so suspiciously? Is Ralph a traitor? O:

Also, hooray for mysterious boxes and things on the stairs. Finally, some mind blowing action again. I hope it's a zombie. I want to see Lily blow some heads off with that new gun. ;P

Velvet.

Hmm, Aidan is quite sick, isn't he? He's such a strange guy though, I don't know what to make of him. Sometimes I think he's mentally impaired, other times I get the feeling he's just hiding something. And Susan? Eh?

Ehm... I will admit that this is a very interesting and humourous story, however, I feel that the conversations are a little unnatural.

The voice, I commented on it before, is very cool, it's a funny, easy to know voice, but it's eccentric to the point that it kind of feels impersonal. Like, Lily is just talking to talk, she's just sort of giving us her opinion on everything. :\

I will give you some props though, as first person stories are generally harder to write than third person and you do a rather good job with this story, but I just don't feel as connected to the story as I did with the first few chapters.

I will not stop reading though, as I must find out what happens for these three as they continue on their escape/zombie hunt.