Review Game!

I don't really like the rhyme (face/erase; plea/be), in my opinion in sounds a little forced and makes the wording awkward.
I do like the message, and I love the "I hope you hear every tear/That has fallen down my face".

Cheers,
Rachel

This is a good piece. I especially like the first four lines of this. I think they are the best ones in the poem. Having a rhyme at the end is an interesting idea. I think i would put either a comma in after cries before i plea, or move the I plea down to the next line. I found that part a little confusing. Other than that, I think it was really good.

So short, and yet it's not simple at all. It's got an amazing flow, as well, a great comfortable rhyme scheme. I love it!

Love,
~Dia

Wow, Brie

Very short but extremely powerful.

I could feel the emotion pouring out of each word so I don't think there's a way to make it any better than it is!

Great job.

Ps. Danny??