exiteing!

it is lovely seeing the world from a different angle that we are used to. I love this.

The idea of using bees is really interesting... its not an animal or creature most ppl like, yet you definitely made me relate to them... very good piece.. a new take on the whole idea..

I loved this poem! I felt sorry for the bees when it was winter and everything was dying. I cheered (with the them!) as summer brought new life for the bees. It really does show the cycle of life especially in nature and different seasons. Well done!

this poem is truly beautiful! interesting subject :)

Another review I felt compelled to make. I like your poem! It's got a good moral theme! I reckon yours has a more realistic one than mine..."determination...persistence..."...*shiver*

Anyway, nice rhymes! I find it a bit hard to find the appropriate word if I have to stick to a rhyming pattern.

Hello! Cute poem. :)

The one bit of criticism that I have is that the last stanza doesn't rhyme like the others do. "Rainfall" doesn't match "once more". It sort of through me off when I was reading it. You might want to look at it.

Nice work, otherwise! Hope you did well in the contest!

- Ruatha

Pale grass? Wow, I love that! -

Your poem makes me fell cold. It made me fell like the bees were asking, "so what do we do now?"

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