| Reviews for Cycle |
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ticktockman 5/1/08 . chapter 1exiteing! it is lovely seeing the world from a different angle that we are used to. I love this. |
simpleplan13 2/4/08 . chapter 1The idea of using bees is really interesting... its not an animal or creature most ppl like, yet you definitely made me relate to them... very good piece.. a new take on the whole idea.. |
Oracle of Destiny 10/12/07 . chapter 1I loved this poem! I felt sorry for the bees when it was winter and everything was dying. I cheered (with the them!) as summer brought new life for the bees. It really does show the cycle of life especially in nature and different seasons. Well done! |
i am not what i have 10/5/07 . chapter 1this poem is truly beautiful! interesting subject :) |
xEmoMuffinx 10/5/07 . chapter 1Another review I felt compelled to make. I like your poem! It's got a good moral theme! I reckon yours has a more realistic one than mine..."determination...persistence..."...*shiver* Anyway, nice rhymes! I find it a bit hard to find the appropriate word if I have to stick to a rhyming pattern. |
RuathaWehrling 10/3/07 . chapter 1Hello! Cute poem. :) The one bit of criticism that I have is that the last stanza doesn't rhyme like the others do. "Rainfall" doesn't match "once more". It sort of through me off when I was reading it. You might want to look at it. Nice work, otherwise! Hope you did well in the contest! - Ruatha |
Near 9/28/07 . chapter 1Pale grass? Wow, I love that! - Your poem makes me fell cold. It made me fell like the bees were asking, "so what do we do now?" - |