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ticktockman
2008-05-01
ch 1,
abuseexiteing!
it is lovely seeing the world from a different angle that we are used to. I love this.
simpleplan13
2008-02-04
ch 1,
abuseThe idea of using bees is really interesting... its not an animal or creature most ppl like, yet you definitely made me relate to them... very good piece.. a new take on the whole idea..
Oracle of Destiny
2007-10-12
ch 1,
abuseI loved this poem! I felt sorry for the bees when it was winter and everything was dying. I cheered (with the them!) as summer brought new life for the bees. It really does show the cycle of life especially in nature and different seasons. Well done!
i am not what i have.
2007-10-05
ch 1,
abusethis poem is truly beautiful! interesting subject :)
xEmoMuffinx
2007-10-05
ch 1,
abuseAnother review I felt compelled to make. I like your poem! It's got a good moral theme! I reckon yours has a more realistic one than mine..."determination...persistence..."...*shiver*
Anyway, nice rhymes! I find it a bit hard to find the appropriate word if I have to stick to a rhyming pattern.
RuathaWehrling
2007-10-03
ch 1,
abuseHello! Cute poem. :)

The one bit of criticism that I have is that the last stanza doesn't rhyme like the others do. "Rainfall" doesn't match "once more". It sort of through me off when I was reading it. You might want to look at it.

Nice work, otherwise! Hope you did well in the contest!
-- Ruatha
Near
2007-09-28
ch 1,
abusePale grass? Wow, I love that! ^-^
Your poem makes me fell cold. It made me fell like the bees were asking, "so what do we do now?"
^-^
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