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| ticktockman 2008-05-01 ch 1,  | abuseexiteing! it is lovely seeing the world from a different angle that we are used to. I love this. |
| simpleplan13 2008-02-04 ch 1, | abuseThe idea of using bees is really interesting... its not an animal or creature most ppl like, yet you definitely made me relate to them... very good piece.. a new take on the whole idea.. |
| Oracle of Destiny 2007-10-12 ch 1, | abuseI loved this poem! I felt sorry for the bees when it was winter and everything was dying. I cheered (with the them!) as summer brought new life for the bees. It really does show the cycle of life especially in nature and different seasons. Well done! |
| i am not what i have. 2007-10-05 ch 1, | abusethis poem is truly beautiful! interesting subject :) |
| xEmoMuffinx 2007-10-05 ch 1, | abuseAnother review I felt compelled to make. I like your poem! It's got a good moral theme! I reckon yours has a more realistic one than mine..."determination...persistence..."...*shiver* Anyway, nice rhymes! I find it a bit hard to find the appropriate word if I have to stick to a rhyming pattern. |
| RuathaWehrling 2007-10-03 ch 1, | abuseHello! Cute poem. :) The one bit of criticism that I have is that the last stanza doesn't rhyme like the others do. "Rainfall" doesn't match "once more". It sort of through me off when I was reading it. You might want to look at it. Nice work, otherwise! Hope you did well in the contest! -- Ruatha |
| Near 2007-09-28 ch 1, | abusePale grass? Wow, I love that! ^-^ Your poem makes me fell cold. It made me fell like the bees were asking, "so what do we do now?" ^-^ |