 SuzannaR 2009-03-22 . chapter 1Hiya :)
I liked this one, I liked how you described the tears as falling on both your soul and heart, that's emotionally powerful, and a good choice of words there.
I like the imagery too, silvery tears, I see them like mercury aka quicksilver, falling on the heart, looking like liquid silver, sliding off. (Damn, I should be a poet!)
I liked that.
Good job
Suzanna from the review marathon, see link in profile. |
 Dormio 2008-01-26 . chapter 1Simple beauty. I love it. |
 Dreaming Chica 2008-01-16 . chapter 1Wow, beautiful imagery, and choice of words. Amazing, Wonderful job!
♥ Dreaming Chica ♥ |
 Yuki Nabe 2007-11-17 . chapter 1Ah so nice, I wish I could write haiku to...
- Yuki |
 criti-sized 2007-10-08 . chapter 1Though not as great as the first one I read, this one still gives the same nice amount of imagery that you had in the first one.
This actually reminds me of a poem I read a long time ago about a girl that was trying to perfect herself for everybody else, and in the effect of that she lost herself. But from not knowing herself, she felt like her heart was stained and blah, blah, blah.
I probably got this haiku all wrong, so feel free to correct me and tell me what you really meant by it.
C.S. |
 All Alone With Her Thoughts 2007-10-07 . chapter 1You managed to say so much in one small haiku. Nice job.
And, thanks for the review.
Rowan. |
 Counting Petals 2007-10-01 . chapter 1Again, nice job with the imagery! |
 upsidedown.underwater 2007-09-30 . chapter 1nice job...i relly like this :]
...~Lie |
 JcLkTb 2007-09-29 . chapter 1interesting... quite deep, too. nice haiku, you should write more of these.
-Dr34mer |
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