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| Nemonus 2007-10-17 ch 1,  | abuseNot bad. I like the third and forth lines. The intro of the character, "the man", is very quick and vague, so that I can't really undestand who he is or identify with him. He is there to populate the apocalypse, it seems...or cause it, "the earth cried for him"? That line does make him more important. Should that be "fateful" in the last line? |
| Duzen Broken DreamZ 2007-09-29 ch 1, | abuseI thought it was beautiful! great job! |
| CrazyTurtles 2007-09-28 ch 1, | abuseVery beatiful. Lots of emotions. |
| Twilight Starr 2007-09-28 ch 1, | abuseInteresting poem. Good luck with poetry and life. Have a wonderful day. :) ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Camille the Clever 2007-09-28 ch 1, | abuse11 lines with more meaning than most can claim to have; I think it's wonderful. |