|Reviews for Thirteen|
| Moonlit Forest 6/27/08 . chapter 1
thats cool in a creative way
| Charity F 5/23/08 . chapter 1
Rhyming is pretty hard and you've done really well here to achieve this.
But that also compromised the rhythm of your piece at certain points.
On the whole though, you were very powerful.
| dragongirl1992 9/30/07 . chapter 1
that is so sad... poor person...
| Stella Celestial 9/29/07 . chapter 1
| Nirnaeth Arnoediad 9/28/07 . chapter 1
I enjoyed this; the imagery is very evocative, and I could definitely tell it was about the Holocaust. The wording, though, got really awkward sometimes when you were looking for a way to rhyme. I know it's hard to complete a couplet sometimes (hard enough that I don't really write rhyming poetry anymore), but when you structure a sentence backwards or sideways just to get the rhyme, it really pulls the reader out of the poem. I like the poem as a whole, and the imagery is really beautiful, but it could definitely benefit from some work in places.