Whoo! Wow that was a perfect last stanza. The third one sounded a little hmm-what's-going-on-here to me but it's alright, the romance the last stanza more than made up for it.

The last stanza is marvellous - love the word choice. Ah. 'exquisite, unfurling rose' and 'condensed'. *applause*

The word 'sleek' sounds incongruent though.

Keep updating! Haha at least you're doing so. My account is growing mould. Yay looking forward to more writing from you hehheh (:

Ok, I admit it! Clicked on that cos I just love the taste of a Caramel Frappe...except your words gave this all a new meaning. You have managed to capture such a beautiful moment in the delicate taste of a kiss...lovely