Um, can I nit-pick here? I guess that you might like to replace "5 years old" with "kids", because it is virtually impossible to determine a kid's real age. And I guess that you have meant "strong gust OF wind". Um, just ignore me if I am wrong.

Nevertheless, I love this story because I have experienced loneliness on countless occasions. I feel like giving the girl a hug to warm her up!

wow, that was very good. like i could feel how it must feel to be alone like lily did just by the way you wrote it.

great work, keep it up!

totally loved it! i mean, i feel like that sometimes -- like why does everyone else get such perfect people and im stuck only persued by idiots... anyway it was real good :D. favourite stories list!

i feel the same way alot really...alone and cold :[. if i was in this story id at least try to get to know her, whether or not I was one she turned to for warmth, however, is simply her choice...

good, i enjoyed it ...5 stars out of 5 ^^

It's relateable to those who think they will never have a loved one.

Nice story although it was sad.

Good luck with writing, this story, and life.

Have a wonderful day. :)

~Twilight Starr~