good only one critisim at the end you say "i thought you were smarter then that"then you say "But WE were wrong" it kinda lost me for a sec

I agree with Iwai, I can definitely hear this being sung, and it's a lot better than most things we hear on the radio these days, anyway. It was incredibly powerful, especially the fifth verse. Keep it up!

I think its good, if it ever became a song i'd like to hear it.