 Luny Loona 2007-10-05 . chapter 1Yes, I found a rhyming poem! Thanks for writing one!
I agree with the 'loner' part. I also agree with the title.
The line: 'I am the girl in the back of the crowd'...is it 'in' or 'at'?
The line: 'I can be invisible it's always allowed' is missing a dash or colon.
I don't suggest you put full-stops at the end of each line, because then that cuts off the flow.
I like the line about the charmeleon - nice metaphor! And I also like how you actually manage to put language techniques into your poem. |