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| Noelle Clark 2008-07-01 ch 1,  | abuseSounds like me... lol. You're very good at capturing emotions in your poetry. |
| Luny Loona 2007-10-05 ch 1, | abuseYes, I found a rhyming poem! Thanks for writing one! I agree with the 'loner' part. I also agree with the title. The line: 'I am the girl in the back of the crowd'...is it 'in' or 'at'? The line: 'I can be invisible it's always allowed' is missing a dash or colon. I don't suggest you put full-stops at the end of each line, because then that cuts off the flow. I like the line about the charmeleon - nice metaphor! And I also like how you actually manage to put language techniques into your poem. |
| Sexy vampirechick 2007-10-05 ch 1, | abuseI really liked this poem.Your words flow really fluently,really like it a lot. |
| JustMeAndMyPen 2007-10-05 ch 1, | abuseI like this, I can really relate to it- i cant say im in the same postion but the way that you used the contrast of other people to paint the picture is really effective, and interesting. I think the last line is my favourite...hazy is such a great word haha. no idea why :D |