Devouring Daisies
2007-10-01
ch 1,  | abuseIt was really interesting for something really short, but I suppose that is because it was the prologue. I only have one nit pick, on the last sentence it says: "I carefully took Patroklos’ little hand and stroke over his tiny fingers with my thumb." when I believe it should have said "I carefully took Patroklos’ little hand and STROKED over his tiny fingers with my thumb." You just missed the 'D' good story though; I admire your courage in writing Historical Fiction, for I know I would never be able to do so. Keep on doing a fantastic job. |
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