Oh, I did like that. It was pretty interesting. I did see a few spelling mistakes and the way you typed out both songs all the way through kind of annoyed me a bit. But other than that, I did enjoy this first chapter. Throughout the next chapters though, don't be afraid to do a little character development; I wouldn't mind seeing that. Good job. :D


^.^ DeeDee ^.^

i'm in love with this story! It's really good but i'm kinda sad that you decided to kinda cut it off. or maybe you died in which case i'm really sorry to hear that. anyways i hope that you haven't given up on this story yet.

the summary has the main character's name as Tara Lynne Carolson, and the character information has the main character's name as Ellin Lynne Carolson...

i'm kinda confused

umm... u might wanna rephrase the whole 'i am a 14 year old writter (wrong sp) who only just found out that she has a talent for writting this year'thing..

i don't think that'll get u as many reviews.

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OMG!! i totally love this. please update. i need to know what will happen

hey
i'd just like to say, i like the way your story is heading
but you just need to look out for a few simple mistakes like punctuation and stuff
also, i think you should focus more on the history between Elie and Jake before you get them going, you know?
more dialogue would always be useful but apart from that your story has great potential
update soon