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| GrannyP 2008-02-05 ch 3,  | abuseSetting goals for yourself is awesome! That's what I like to do! It keeps me motivated. Anyway, this was a cute chapter. Maybe it was a bit of a transition chapter, to intro all the characters. Sometimes its a bit hard to follow stories that have a lot of characters (like I can talk, my current story has 5 MAIN characters...) so make sure that each character has a crucial role in the future and that their part can not be easily eliminated. Did that even make sense? I have no idea. Good luck with your writing! |
| Caffeinated Poison 2008-02-05 ch 3, | abuseOo I know the song. It's by Finger Eleven. Paralyzer is it not? |
| Friggin-Crazy 2007-12-26 ch 2, | abuseHA I love your story. Please update soon! Friggin |
| Kaleigh Windelynn 2007-12-20 ch 2, | abuseAwesome. Keep it going. I expect something soom... |
| Inkhearts and Inkstains 2007-12-20 ch 2, | abuseHey, great start. I can't wait for more. Kat |
| GrannyP 2007-12-20 ch 2, | abuseThat was so cute! I love how the dream ended, where it was actually what Seth was doing in real life and Jaeden there. Nie job! |
| Caught In A Simple Game 2007-12-19 ch 2, | abuseI think you're doing a great job. I am very interested to see where this will go! I think I mentioned this last time, but the only improvements I would suggest are some grammatical stuff. Keep up the great work! |
| GrannyP 2007-12-18 ch 1, | abuseI think your story is starting out pretty good and I would like to read more to see where you are going with the plot. The other thing that was a bit confusing to me was the names at the beginning. There is Jaeden and then "Jacen"... I assume these are the same person, but I didn't know if this was just a typo. Anyway, great start! GrannyP |
| Dancing In Magic 2007-10-15 ch 2, | abusewell, it looks great so far, can't eait to read more. And you left me off right when it was coming good! Dang! lol, well, see ya laters! :D |
| Caught In A Simple Game 2007-10-01 ch 1, | abuseI like the idea you've got here, and I am anxious to see where it goes. The only thing you might watch out for is some run-on sentences . . . Petty, I know, but I am an English major, so it's my habit to point those things out. Looking forward to the next chapter. |
| DazedStarr. 2007-10-01 ch 1, | abuseAwesome Start. I Like So Far. Update Soon. |
| Twilight Starr 2007-10-01 ch 1, | abuseGood start. This story has potential. Good luck with writing, this story, and life. Have a wonderful day. :) ~Twilight Starr~ |