Reviews for Legend of the Lone Lotus

concerto49 2008-02-02 ch 1,	abuseHm more plants. Ha, I feel sorry for the lotus. This reminds me of how people promote a better environment and recycling. Very true that people all just care about themselves. This gives me more the impression of some of those fables I used to read when small. I guess if this was about animals or people it'd be a bit boring maybe, but the lotus fixed it all up. Well, cheers.
N.E. Olson 2007-10-03 ch 1,	abuse"In spring, there would be many birds that came out and sung." You are switching tenses here from future to past. Not good. Since the first sentence is in the past, I would just put the entire thing in the past: In spring there were many birds that came out and sang. As I read further I see that the entire first paragraph has a tendency to switch. Ooh! That's really cool that it's written from the viewpoint of a tree. I like it! Wow. That hit an environmental sore spot. I thought it was very well written and thought provoking.
xEmoMuffinx 2007-10-02 ch 1,	abuseIt has a very nice feel to it and the same atmostphere was maintained throughout. Sounds like it is narrated by an old oak tree. There's nothing wrong with it, I like it. It has good...emotions.