I loved the last stanza there. Lovely.

The whole feeling actually reminds me of my latest poem though... Life seldom turns out as you want I guess.

But more to the point, I think a few of the lines were a bit long to give the flow I usually like while reading, and I'm a bit sceptical to no capital letters whatsoever.

But well, that's my personal taste, and since I keep writing this long thing the conclusion is that I liked it.