Okay, this was very cool indeed. I was actually blackly amused as I read it. This Peter guy is definitely "twisted". Hehe.

I loved the bit where you described his Roman artifacts.

Whoaah.

Now that's some twisted stuff you have.

I love it :).

The only bit I didn't like was the bold-facing of certain sections of the story when you change the time-line. It kinda kills the consistency.

Otherwise, good job :)

Powerful and very interesting.

I like the beginning it was dramatic and good at drawing a reader in.

It struck me as a little unnecessary to use bold to begin the transition of time when a simple line break I think would have been nicer on the eye, but that’s just a personal preference.

Peter was obsessive wasn’t he? Slightly scary but also very interesting…the way Peter didn’t mind at all about dying, just so he could be like Caesar, I know he was obsessed with the Roman General but I have to wonder what was so wrong with Peter the boy, that made him leave all that behind. To be honest, I didn't like him- he was far too pompous- so it was hard to really sympathize with him at death. But it was still a good look at an obsession.

I love the way you describe Peter’s little transitions into fantasy, the description of the Colosseum …and even the way he talks is slightly more archaic then his contemporaries which was a nice touch. And then at the end when the two worlds merged like that *shiver*.

Language-wise, you have a very good vocabulary- I like how this focuses more on feelings and Rome than it does on descriptions of the present, helps you to know where Peter’s mind is at.

Good job!

Not bad. Interesting little one-shot.

Crepy! But cool, if a bit twisted. I liked how he became Caesar in the end and replaced his name for Caesar's.

very interesting