Looks pretty good, doesn't exactly end on a cliff-hanger, but leaves you wondering what's going to happen next... kinda feels anti-climactic in a few ways, definitely not a standard story.

Loved it very well laid out and planned. Gives substantial insight as to why hes there and what he is doing. Very very nice paper.

Very descriptive in the details. Story moves along, ends with a little bit of suspense. I haven't read much..there might be more, like before this one, but if there weren't, then a description of Troy woudl be nice, a description of the girl he meets too.