I wonder what would happened next? Please update soon.

That's was a short chapter! Who is the ememy?

Good Job! :)

Whoa, The first meeting between Briar and Imajane didin't go well.

Good Chapter. I wonder who is the princess?

Pretty interesting. I'll be reading more of it.

Did you get this idea from D&D? It sounds exacly like a campaign from there.

Anyway, this is fairly interesting. Your character discriptions are through but they lack potential flow. The sentences seem to flow like you are reporting there looks to us. Still, you got the look across period so kudos for that.

Your spelling and grammar are well done to. Its a lot better than my story right now. Anyway, you just need to watch out for the finer details, like repeating words and phrases.
"Two warriors carried a large sack heaving it across the cobblestone ground. The warriors carried the sack in till they stopped at a wooden door with a bared window." In this section in chapter three, you said "warriors" twice in the same sentence. If you replace the second word with "they", I think the sentence will flow better.

This does look good. I'm curious about what happens next. Keep up the good work.

I hope you can read my story "Dark Star" and leave a review. I would greatly appreciate your time and attention.

Signed
Kouta Aburame

P.S: You say you need someone to draw right? I'm not the best but I'll try to fit it into my schedule if you want.